Wednesday, February 18, 2009

Mad Rush

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3 comments:

  1. dviluanFebruary 18, 2009 at 2:26 PM

    Brian, when I saw your title and first image I thought your story was going to be about a bike race, but I found your actual story to be way more interesting.

    Your point of view clearly states the purpose of trying to rush because you had to catch a flight in three hours but you ended up breaking your arm! You focused on your topic, which made it understanding to view. Glad your okay!

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  2. SageFebruary 19, 2009 at 8:35 PM

    Hey Brian,

    You really caught me off guard like dviluan. I thought this was also going to be about a competition. However, once i got into the story i was pulled in and felt the rush that you went through. I think what made it great was the economy of the story. I didn't think it should have had more detail or have been longer. I like how you chose your words on what to say. It drew me in.

    Great Job!!

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  3. ramatiasFebruary 23, 2009 at 2:57 AM

    just like how the other 2 said, i tought the whole story was gonna be about biking. i was amazed to see that your arm was like rubber. ive never broken are sprained anything yet so i dont know how it feels.

    over all, i think it was a good story but it felt like there was no personality put into it. your voice was the same through out the story which is okay but i wouldve recommended changing the pitch at some points.

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